The Sadness of Endless War Inst Mix 1 Parts 1-3 by Bankrupts

Bankrupts
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This is the demo/music only combined parts 1 - 3 that will most likely be divided into its 3 distinct parts. This is the shell, the concept, the heart of the song, not a finished product. It is not entered into the contest.

The song as is is 8:32, very long.
It has a part 1 that is 3 minutes of spoken word, an anti-war poem.
Indeed, it could be broken out as Man’s Inhumanity to Man or The English Lesson.
Part 2 is instrumental, has I believe 3 parts, and really provides a soft interlude.
I imagine this could handle all sorts of guitar, but currently it is drumless.
In fact, the drums stopped in the fourth verse of the opening poem and never returns.
Part 3 is the final part and the actual song, The Sadness of Endless War.
Currently the music plays the vocal melody, probably not a great thing but it does.
The entire song is not rushed, drags at times. I am mostly OK with that.
I may be better off dividing into 3 songs. That will satisfy the shorter attention span du jour.
It may then require more variety in its arrangements in each part to keep people interested, although I like its mellow relaxing mood. I’m not interested in musically creating war sounds, but on the contrary peace sounds.
I most likely compare it to progressive concept albums ala early Moody Blues.
If I had collaboration, it might very well evolve faster in arrangement. I’d love to have a foreign input or two, as certainly my concept is outside anybody else’s. However, there is something beautiful about it in parts.
I like the spoken song, the instrumental song, the protest song. Some may hate all but one of them. Some may think they are a fine trilogy.
To become my harshest critic, there’s not enough action in the arrangements. No bass! The drum beat does not match the music. Or no drums! No guitar! The synths do not much beyond an ambient background. In other words, no soundtrack type coordination with words or even in instrumental just flows. Not enough emotional roller coastering. Flat.
Imagine is the song I must compare to for 3. It is very soft, but I think it has a little string part behind the piano, maybe drums in parts, but I think that is it. It uses a simple piano riff, I use an arpeggio.

Right now there is a lot of analog timing, which I feel humanizes it more. I am too close to it right now. I enjoy the instrument sounds. I like the simple chords, the simple arpeggio, and the complex arpeggios. I like the simple melodies. There are at least 4. Part 1, Part 2 has 3, Part 3 has 2. They all feel related. Only Part 3 behaves like a song.

Lyrics

The Sadness of Endless War

by Steve Bancroft

Spoken Verses:
beyond all nationalities
to living within societies
man’s inhumanity to man
across all time and space doth span

left expressed and explained in poetry
a major literary theme for all to learn
taught in high school english classes
this lesson oft spurned by the masses

you might think that it would be
the primary lesson in history
but to historians it remains a mystery
doomed to repeat itself endlessly

for history is mostly written by the winners
naming saints, condemning sinners
rationalizations of past and present observations
the future a wound in need of a suture

but truth be told or bought or sold
if passions run hot or hearts be cold
as fears and hopes on fashion fly
to not even try, to just get by

there will be some who read the clever verse
and understand the tragic human curse
and make the poet’s point a tad more clear
‘til one day everyone might chance to hear

Chorus:
if only dreamers ran the world
imagine our anthem everywhere
peace sign on our flag unfurled
and with our arms we shoot
peace signs in the air

Verse 1:
maybe it will end this time for good
it could, it should, I wish it would
knock on wood, it’s hard to take anymore
the sadness of endless war

Verse 2:
it ebbs and flows, comes and goes
where it stops, nobody knows
then disagreements come to blows
peace so close, hard to take anymore
the sadness of endless war

Chorus:
if only dreamers ran the world
imagine our anthem everywhere
peace sign on our flag unfurled
and with our arms we shoot
peace signs in the air

Verse 3:
I know I’m not the only one
some have come, some have gone
call for peace and many yawn
nothing new under the sun
life goes on, it’s so hard to take it anymore
the sadness of endless war

Chorus:
if only dreamers ran the world
imagine our anthem everywhere
peace sign on our flag unfurled
and with our arms we shoot
peace signs in the air