6000 stars by Bankrupts

Bankrupts
Experimental
Current Round: 1  
1.44
 

This was a result of my true amazement at the answer to the question, and I sort of combined it with this otherwise traditional love song idea. I would say, based on the rule that if it doesn't fall into one of the top 24 niches then it is experimental, that this is experimental. But just because it's experimental doesn't mean it can't be fun!

Featured Review

‘I wish there weren’t so many words’, she said.
‘But there are never enough words’, I replied.
‘I wish there weren’t so many stars’, she said.
‘Do you mean those only visible with the naked eye? Or all of them - even the ones we can never see?’
With so little unsaid, we parted that night and, like she’d suggested, I joined the army.

Thus goes the closing paragraph of the novella inspired by this song. Its military drums left few other options. He was a poet and she worked in the typing pool, so she’d had her fill of words. Action, or even silence, was what she craved.
But this tune is really what happens when David Byrne gets into his rocking chair and muses while leaving the telly on. Everything seems sad even though the lyrics frequently aren’t. Even the hopefulness sounds hopeless.
Vast plains of emptiness are before us, and a giant sky full of orange. A conversation they’d had before many times was about to resume, beginning at the point where it had been abandoned. But it would not stimulate, because after forty years of marriage, the stars were invisible and the eyes no longer naked, but clothed coldly behind glasses. He had survived the war, and returned to claim her.
‘Come back to the car, Vern. There’s nothing up there’.

Krispy

Lyrics

6000 stars by Steve Bancroft

we were talking ‘bout love
and how much we loved each other
then one metaphor simply led to another
until I told her that I, because I so love her
would pay a dollar for every star in the sky
that was visible with the naked eye
and buy us a big house on a hill by a river

yes, I would pay a dollar
for every star in the sky
visible with the naked eye

then she laughed so hard
she nearly fell off her chair
she was having trouble breathing
for a couple minutes there
and of all of the things that I thought she’d do next
the last was a bear hug and a whisper in my ear

she said I know that your love for me
grows every hour
and you would do everything you could
within your power
but that house on the hill
sounds more like a trailer
because with the naked eye
you can see 6000 stars in the sky

I’d told her that I, no I did not know better
would pay a dollar for every star in the sky
yes, I’d pay a dollar for every star in the sky
that was visible with the naked eye
and buy us a house on a hill by a river

well I suppose I felt abashed like a Jeopardy loser
but truly I felt my mind begin to wonder
how off I had been in my scale of reality
by an order of magnitude, but does it matter to me?

is it much different than
how deluded men once were
when the earth was much flatter
and the center of the universe?
did that make a difference
in knowing what love was?
when all of the stars in the sky
were visible with the naked eye

that house on the hill
sounds more like a trailer
because with the naked eye
you can see 6000 stars in the sky

so I said my point is in love
it doesn’t matter who’s smarter
your love is my universe’s only charted center
and I would change my promise and give you a penny
for every 1000 kilometers to Alpha Centauri

I had no idea how much that would be
but she laughed again loudly while slapping her knee
and she practically yelled it
I’m holding you to it
and now I know I’m in for it
I’m gonna have to google it
how much could it be?

6000 stars, 6000 stars
only 6000 stars in the sky
are visible with the naked eye