Unbroken

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Unbroken

Postby jaymz » Sat May 11, 2013 9:28 pm

So i used to have this song called song 43.. never could find any way to get lyrics or vocal melodies to it. Outsourced it for a while, everything that people came up with sucked..

So I took the guitar riff, reversed a portion of it and wrote a different song..

I have some great melodies for this, I just need to finish lyrics.. The Chorus is gonna be big.

Here is the original from 3 years ago.

http://dallasnetworks.net/media/project ... ox_441.mp3

And here is the alt-version.

https://soundcloud.com/satellite-down/u ... partialvox
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Re: Unbroken

Postby cjdenecia » Sat May 11, 2013 11:07 pm

jaymz wrote:So i used to have this song called song 43.. never could find any way to get lyrics or vocal melodies to it. Outsourced it for a while, everything that people came up with sucked..

So I took the guitar riff, reversed a portion of it and wrote a different song..

I have some great melodies for this, I just need to finish lyrics.. The Chorus is gonna be big.

Here is the original from 3 years ago.

http://dallasnetworks.net/media/project ... ox_441.mp3

And here is the alt-version.

https://soundcloud.com/satellite-down/u ... partialvox


I like the new better too - tho I'd rather hear you get to the chorus a whole lot quicker. shortening up that second verse some .... like the guitar on the break area - it'd be cool to have an orchestra do a passage there instead of a lead guitar, loads of strings - easily intermixed with vocals ....
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