"Noir/Jaune" -- an instrumental REHEARSAL TAPE

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"Noir/Jaune" -- an instrumental REHEARSAL TAPE

Postby PopTodd » Tue Sep 22, 2015 1:43 pm

A rehearsal tape of me and the HoP drummer/keys player working out a new instrumental a few weeks ago. In the background, you can hear his 1-year-old baby crying because she doesn't want to nap.

But the dulcet tones of our melodies lull her gently to sleep and by about a minute and a half into it, you can no longer hear her.

Anyway, it's still very rough, as you can tell by my giving instructions to Dave as we play. But I think that it's going in the right direction. I have a few notes already about the arrangement (Dave messed up the transition between the 2 parts), but am open to some more thoughts on instrumentation. Get my wheels turning.

"Noir/Jaune"

And yeah, the guitar is a little bit out of tune. It's a piece of shit instrument that I borrowed from him for the rehearsal.
Also, we are still trying to work out a piano melody for the second part of the piece. But we'll get there.
Just wanted to share and see what y'all had to say about the bones of the piece.
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Re: "Noir/Jaune" -- an instrumental REHEARSAL TAPE

Postby steban » Wed Sep 23, 2015 4:12 pm

Hey Todd, that was a pretty composition, worthy of full development. The suggestions are easy to imagine, and I wouldn't be surprised it would go along those lines and beyond.

This intermediary view of the birth of a song is almost as interesting as the final version, hearing the basis of its idea/structure. I'm fine with the out of tune guitar even, adds authenticity.
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