"Come Around Again"

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"Come Around Again"

Postby PopTodd » Wed Sep 21, 2011 3:12 pm

This is really just a demo; nothing that I'm going to re-work for final presentation or anything. But I am completely re-recording it for an EP that I am working on. Just want to all to hear the song and let me know what you think.
"Come Around Again"
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Re: "Come Around Again"

Postby cjdenecia » Wed Sep 21, 2011 11:06 pm

nothing wrong ... lots right. demo values for sure though ...needing lots of tightening up on quite a bit but ....

very upbeat. very cool verse melody at first but I wonder if it might need some mixing up to stave off a little redundancy by the end of the song? even though it's short - I get the feeling it might wear a bit thin on repeated listens. the chorus is wanting to be infectious but it's missing a little something. it may be the lack of really nailing the "hey" that's a bit of a bother ... something that might be balanced by using a staggered group of harmonies on the hey ... hey hEY HEY .. .60's styled - maybe beatlesquelike.

like the lead interlude, even the dirt tube sound ...also tho, wonder if a C section (bridge) vocally might break up the verse melody thought I had earlier. something that seems to be related but holding a bit different melodic vibe. the breakdown helps - works even - but it's still keeping in line totally with what came before.

but with all that said - as is, I'm still liking it a lot, just sorta wishing it would make more of itself. good luck on the redux.
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Re: "Come Around Again"

Postby Jay » Thu Sep 22, 2011 5:33 am

It's a fun ditty, but I'm almost certain you could come up with a more interesting verse melody.
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Re: "Come Around Again"

Postby Steve Ison » Sat Jan 21, 2012 10:53 am

Todd..I really like this..Charming n intuitive..Vocal melody works fine for me on the verse - its great-def don't change that..The whole songs v repetitive n dittyish - but its cool and i like it swimming in my head ...
I actually really like the production you'vwe got now-but look forward to hearing the finished thing
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