Money is freedom of choice

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Money is freedom of choice

Postby steban » Fri Aug 12, 2011 1:29 am

Well, I think this has some characteristics of Rich Tycoon, seems to be one of my trademark PF wannabe sounds, which I don't think always sound so great.

This time I'm liking the lyrics thus far as well as the drums and the bass and the guitar (all me- yes, I can play guitar again, so to speak) and the synths, but the chaos at this stage is frightening.

Experimental? Alternative Rock? As is? WIP? Thanks in advance.

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everyone is in the middle
we all run at different speeds
everyone has special talents
everyone is special needs
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Re: Money is freedom of choice

Postby Steve Ison » Sat Jan 21, 2012 11:02 am

Steban..I really like the moodiness and atmosphere you created and the first 2 verses were great..Its like you were in control of the wild beast on those 2 , but after that the stallion of chaos reared up n rode off and you totally lost control of the reins..
I actually really like the 'money is freedom of speech' souly vocal bit you do later too-but i really wish this was some proper structure-and another chord change here..It really feels underdeveloped as it is, like a doodled instrumental you've just sung over..
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Re: Money is freedom of choice

Postby steban » Thu Jan 26, 2012 1:24 am

You can just copy this if you ever review it officially, Steve!

Steve Ison wrote:Steban..I really like the moodiness and atmosphere you created and the first 2 verses were great..Its like you were in control of the wild beast on those 2 , but after that the stallion of chaos reared up n rode off and you totally lost control of the reins..
I actually really like the 'money is freedom of speech' souly vocal bit you do later too-but i really wish this was some proper structure-and another chord change here..It really feels underdeveloped as it is, like a doodled instrumental you've just sung over..


You hit it on the head, the final half to third feels doodled and repetitious, stressed. I don't really have an idea yet for that, but I know exactly what you mean. At the time I was excited by the first part I was ignoring the ending, I suppose.

It's funny, I hadn't heard this song in a while, so I'd forgotten how it went, so I had to play it again. Now I am freshly tempted to toy with it. All it takes is a fitting angle (not angel), thinking outside the box required.
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