"Angels Weeping (Once Lovely in the Distance)"

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Re: "Angels Weeping (Once Lovely in the Distance)"

Postby Krispy » Tue Aug 23, 2011 12:55 pm

Steve Ison wrote:I disagree with...Kim that there's too many words..It is what it is-and the vocal line ('specially the verse) is instantly followable n natural.

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Re: "Angels Weeping (Once Lovely in the Distance)"

Postby charvie » Sat Aug 27, 2011 9:01 pm

I kinda dug this tune a bit, the vocal line is a little congested at times, but the guitar kind of pulls you away and makes it seem not so bad. Pretty cool..
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Re: "Angels Weeping (Once Lovely in the Distance)"

Postby HUD » Tue Aug 05, 2014 1:06 pm

The finished version:

http://www.ourstage.com/media_items/PIR ... -lovely-in

There's also an Audiopolis version, but with a low bitrate due to file size restrictions.
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Re: "Angels Weeping (Once Lovely in the Distance)"

Postby Krispy » Wed Aug 06, 2014 6:26 pm

My favourite bit is still the unexpected change in the middle, the bit after 'face to face', and second place the Steve Vai guitar toward the end.

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Re: "Angels Weeping (Once Lovely in the Distance)"

Postby ingolee » Sat Aug 30, 2014 7:13 pm

Lot's of guitar, tasteful, well-played, that's always good. Drums, basic but adequate. Vocals good, lyrics over my head, but that happens a lot. I don't hear Steve Vai here but that's probably good too!

This could be part of an extended work, suite, concept album?
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